Week 4 Storybook, The Flight of Val


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The late afternoon sun glowed through thinning clouds. Resolute light broke through in angled columns landing on a mournful gathering. The echoing report of an honorary salute shook Major Newman with each crack. Opening his eyes and raising his bowed head, he recalled a moment he had shared with Val looking through a cockpit window.
“Look,” Val had said, pointing a finger at the golden rays breaking through the gray ceiling. “Someone is having a religious moment down there.” Major Newman had only responded with a nod as he scanned the instruments in front of him. Despite his fleeting acknowledgement, the moment had always resonated with him.
Now Newman looked upon a flag covered casket. As the mortal vessel of his commanding officer was lowered below the solemn crowd, he whispered to himself, “Today its yours.”
A year prior, Lieutenant Colonel Valisky had flown a routine patrol sortie that had left him under an OIG investigation. The Light Colonel believed in leading from the front. He always took his turn in the muck. He was a point man; tip of the spear. Valisky was known as “Skipper” to his squadron, but he was “Val” to his staff officers. This familiarity was the only breach into fraternization that the skipper offered his leadership corps.
To Newman, he was a brother. The pair had grown up in the same mid-west town. They had graduated high school together. Suffered through OCS and flight school together. Regardless of Newman’s significant accomplishments, Val was always a step above. This didn’t bother Newman. He was the son of a share cropper. Val was son of the local pastor. Newman had grown up in Val’s shadow. In many ways, Val owed Newman a debt for his consistent support. As a witness to the staunchly acerbic sense of moral justice that Pastor Valisky had beat into his son, Newman had been Val’s faithful recovery mechanism. As a testament to the character of the Valisky family, a young lieutenant Val had been gifted a book of prayers and a Kimber .45 caliber 1911 Pistol.
OIG’s report led to charges according to the Uniformed Code of Military Justice and resulted in a court martial. Val had been stripped of his command, demoted to field grade officer, and forced into an early retirement. During his fateful flight, a momentary lapse of sound judgement had realigned his moral compass. According to the Investigator General’s report, both aircraft in Val’s sortie had been painted by anti-aircraft artillery. In a response to the imminent threat, the two aircraft split from a formation flight and began evasive maneuvers. Val’s aircraft had gained altitude and popped chafe and flares. The magnetic metal chafe particles had thwarted the enemy’s target lock system, but the triple-A fire had taken out Val’s wing man. In retaliation, Val had returned fire on the artillery nest but had taken out three city blocks in the process. The collateral damage included an occupied elementary school.
In the trailing months, Val had begun to drink heavily. He had never known failure. In his mind, the military court should have vindicated him instead of convicting him. Newman visited his modest apartment on almost a daily basis. At first the Major would sit and lament the circumstances with his friend. After several months the shared misery turned to suicide watch.
Eventually Val’s final fate was realized through the hollow point of a .45 caliber round. Unable to ever recover from his professional fall, Val had dressed himself in his military whites, held his open prayer book in one hand, and his sidearm in the other. Upon citing an appeal for holy intervention, Val pulled the trigger. Newman had found his fallen brother in peace from the destruction he had become. 

Author's Note: Narayan's interpretation of the Ramayana, chapter six, tells the story of Rama and Lakshmana's encounter with the monkey Vali, his brother Sugreeva, and the monkey messenger Hanuman. In the story of Vali, Sugreeva's only release from his exile is through the death of the invincible Vali. In this adaptation, Newman is both the messenger Hanuman and the brother of Vali, Sugreeva. Valinsky is the avatar of Vali. Rama is portrayed through the prayer book and pistol that Valisky's father gives to him upon his commissioning.

Bibliography:

R. K. Narayan, The Ramayan : A Shortened Modern Prose Version of the Indian Epic, Chapter 6 Vali, p 90-105.

Comments

  1. Hi Joshua! I thought your story was very well written. You really know how to pull emotion out of a reader. I am saddened by the death of Val, but it was quite a clever twist on the original story. When writing my stories, I never thought to use objects to represent a character like Rama. I really liked that. I am curious about how you have so much knowledge of planes. Lots of research? Or maybe personal experience?

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    1. Braden, Yes I do have personal experience with aircraft. I was on flight status as a helicopter crew chief in the Marine Corps. The "religious moment" is from an actual conversation I had with one of my pilots. The idea of retelling the story is one aspect of how we are approaching the Ramayana that I am really enjoying (Narayan even explicit states that the nature of the stories are to tell them in a contemporary context). Being able to tell the story as if it where drawn from our own experiences makes it far more intimate and relevant. Thank you for your comments!

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  2. Hi Joshua,

    This is a very well written, well thought out piece. I had to read the authors note in order to recognize which section of the Ramayana was being referenced, but once I had, I went back through the story and was able to pick up on some of the clues. I think if you wanted to expand on this story, and make it mirror that of Sugreeva and Vali even more, it would be interesting to incorporate the betrayal that Sugreeva felt when Vali refused to listen to any explanations from him.

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    1. Tamiko, Thank you! Your suggestion is spot on. The end of the story, in reality was an ending to the evening's homework. I felt like it was missing some sort of integral link that could really bring it together, and you called out exactly what it needed. Good eye!

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  3. Just like the others who read your story, I was kind of lost as to which specific story from the Ramayana this was referring to until I read your author's note and everything clicked. This was a good thing because it shows how well you could immerse these characters into a different world. Using the prayer book and pistol as symbols for Rama was also very clever. You may have intended to stray here, but I don't really see the connection from Newman to Sugreeva except for Newman and Val's roots going back to the same small town where they were like brothers. Maybe you intended for there never to be any animosity between Val and Newman. Having the conflict be strictly internal for Val is a good twist if that is the case. I wonder what could have happened if the court had vindicated Val. Maybe he would have become reckless anyways but this time had confrontations with Newman just as Vali did with Sugreeva, and Rama could still manifest in tool that stops Val. I really liked the setting's description which is shown by your extensive background knowledge.

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  4. Wow, what a creative take on the original story! Your imagination with how to reconstruct the Rama story is very impressive! I enjoyed how I was not completely sure of what exact Ramayana story you were telling until the Author's notes. It allowed me to view your work on it's own terms and not compare. Im wondering if you broke it up a little more and added a main character not in Ramayana to your story if it would add another element to your story? Great job overall and I look forward to reading more of your work!

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  5. Hi Joshua! I enjoyed reading your story. I like how you changed the Ramayana to a military type story. Coming from a family that has military members, it made the story much more interesting!

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